I wrote this in 5th grade when I was 10 years old for the Young Author's Book Fair :D
Opening paragraphs:
My heart started pounding as the waves crashed against the side of the boat. The hair on the back of my neck stood up as I felt cold sea water rush over my sneakers. I picked up a bucket and started bailing water out of the canoe. I looked back and saw the soldier's canoe coming up behind me. I wondered why soldiers would be chasing me, a 15 year old boy. I hadn't committed a crime, I had just run away from the island orphanage.
Suddenly a huge ice beast rose up in front of me. The soldiers were still in back of me. I tried to stop the boat but the oars broke. I crashed into the beast!
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Hehe ahhh that brings back memories :D
4 comments:
What a lovely thing to have. You opened with action, always great. I think it really works; I was right there, up to my shoes in water, with him. *grins
That is so much better than anything I wrote at that age. Thankfully nobody saved any of it.
That's awesome. I wish I had things like this from when I was little. But alas I came in to writing a bit late in life.
That's impressive writing for a ten year old. When I was ten, I didn't write like this. :'(
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